中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析：命题作文(2)

　　［例4］写一篇题为"A Visit To_____"的日记。

　　审题：该题为半命题式作文。考生除了要注意运用正确的日记格式，还可根据自己的经验和熟悉程度来选择、确定文章的主题.

　　学生作文：

　　May 25th, 2004 　　 sunny

　　A Visit To Jinmao Building

　　Jinmao Building has Chinese traditional styles and it is also modern. It is the signal construction of Shanghai. It is located in the center of Lujiazui Financial Area. Our family visited Jinmao Building today.

　　The traffic there is very convenient. You can got here by tunnel and No.2 subway. And if you live near it, you can walk there just like our family. We went to the eighty-eighth floor of Jinmao Building. We saw the whole view of Shanghai there. Please come to Jinmao Building, and you will get some unexpected gains there.

　　教师评析：整篇作文主题明确，对于金茂大厦的描述也较具体，文中"the signal construction"一词是全文的亮点。但整篇文章的层次不够清晰，句子也以简单句为主，对于参观这一动词的阐述还不够充分。

　　教师拟评分：8分

　　中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析：看图写话

　　看图写话

　　看图写话是初中英语作文常考的一种形式，但随着牛津版教材的大量应用，学生的写作能力有了较大的提高，因此中考作文的要求和难度也相应提高。所以，在中 考作文中继续出现简单的叙事型看图写话的可能性很小，但有可能会提供给考生一些具有寓意的漫画或图片，要求考生从中发现问题、提出自己的观点，这对考生的 逻辑思维能力和英语语言的娴熟运用都提出了更高的要求。

　　审题：这幅漫画蕴涵了一个深刻的主题即战争与和平，这与当今世界的热点问题密切相关，它不仅考核考生是否能流畅地表达自己的观点，更需要考生站在人文关怀的高度来观察整个世界。

　　学生作文：

　　A Represent of Freedom and Peace

　　Almost everyday we can see there are always a huge number of pigeons enjoying the sunbath in some large squares, but do you often care what a white pigeon stands for? That is peace. For hundreds of years, people always regard pigeons as a represent of freedom and peace. That is because of not only its lovely pure figure, but also its great passion to the outside world. Till now, I still can't help thinking of such a picture: In Iraq, a boy was watching a white pigeon over his head. The background was full of wounded solders and guns. Thus, this lovely white pigeon was contrastive to this iced background and gave people a deep consideration. Suddenly, athought comes into my mind: Why there have been so many wars in the world just for someone's own interest? Why can't people live like as mall pigeon with freedom? I hope there will not be wars, FOREVER!

　　教师评析：应该说，要把这篇看图作文写好是有相当难度的，但考生以非常流畅的笔调从鸽子联想到自由与和平，再联想到发生在伊拉克的战争。文风成熟老练，这在初中生的作文中是难能可贵的。

　　教师拟评分：10分

　　［例6］审题：该图要求考生先看懂漫画，对它进行清晰的描述，同时根据其隐藏的寓意提出自己的观点，如在此图中应关注树木被砍伐而提出环保的重要性。

　　学生作文：

　　Seeing this picture, we know that these trees have been cut down. But as a very little baby in the picture, he must be puzzled. He will ask: What are these? Are these trees? Of course, in our imagination, trees must be tall, strong and green enough. Actually, his question shows humans a problem that is worth thinking about. The covering rate of the forest in the world has kept decreasing these years and it caused a lot of problems on environment. As we all know, trees are very important in our life. They can make the air fresher, reduce natural disasters and soon. So I appeal: Don't cut down trees. Let' s make our earth greener for our later generation. Don't let the children think trees are only roots!

　　教师评析：整篇作文结构清晰，全文分三段，第一段详细地描述漫画的内容；第二段阐述其蕴涵的寓意即环保对于世界和后代们的重要性；第三段提出作者的号召，使文章的结尾明快、有力！

　　教师拟评分：10分

　　提示性作文：就是给出一个标题或无标题，给出具体的内容，规定一定的字数，让考生写出作文。由于这类作文已经规定了文章的中心思想和主要内容，因此考生可以不再列出提纲，只要把注意力集中在如何正确、完整地用英文词句表达出中心思想和内容就可以了。

　　写好提示性作文应注意的事项：

　　1、仔细审题，明确要求。对所给信息反复阅读，弄清这个题目要表达什么，然后对所给信息进行整理、组织，按照自己的写作思路使之条理化。

　　2、确保语言精炼。在写作过程中，考生应时刻提醒自己按照已给出的信息点去写，不必有太多的发挥。但也不必按照信息点去逐句翻译。用自己熟悉的短语、句型去体现要点。掌握好文章的长度，不要字数过多或过少。

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