中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析：命题作文(3)

　　例题分析

　　一、汉语提示

　　根据中文提示和英文提示词语，写一篇意思连贯、符合逻辑的短文。所给英文提示词语必须用上。字数60～70左右。

　　1、昨天晚上我和妈妈出去散步。

　　2、在路上我遇到了一个外国人。

　　3、他向我询问去温泉饭店（the　Hot　Spring　Hotel）的路。

　　4、我告诉他沿着路往前走，在第三个转弯处向左拐就能看见饭店。

　　5、他非常感谢我，我也为能帮他而感到高兴。

　　提示词语：go out for a walk, on the road, the way to, walk along, on the left, thank for, be happy that（分析）

　　写作指导：根据提示我们了解到这是一篇记叙文，所以考生应马上想到时间（yesterday evening），地点（on the road），人物（I, my mother and a foreigner），事件（how　to show the way）。其次观察信息点，我们确定这篇文章应用过去式来表达。然后，确定这个事件应用第一人称来叙述。最后，按照信息点合理组织文章，别忘用上提示词语。

　　（例文）

　　Yesterday evening,I went out for a walk with my mother.On the road,we met a foreigner.

　　He asked me the way to the Hot Spring Hotel.I told him to walk along the road and take the third turning on the left, then he could see the hotel.He thanked me very much for my help.I was happy that I could help him.

　　二、英语提示

　　你收到一封咨询信，请你以旅行社工作人员的身份完成任务。

　　Dear Ace Travel,

　　I'm Li Ming, from the east of China. For the coming winter vacation, my family and I want to spend our vacation in a foreign city for ten days. We would like to go somewhere not only warm but also interesting. We don't mind how far we have to go. It has to be a place where we can swim everyday, and it would be nice if our hotel is not expensive but clean and comfortable. We like to pay no more than $ 5,000 for the trip. Could you please give us your suggestions for vacation spots?

　　Thanks a lot.

　　Yours,

　　Li Ming

　　请你根据来信，从下列所给的地方中选择一个或两个符合Li Ming要求的地方，向他提出建议。（80字左右）Tokyo, Sydney, Hawaii, Shanghai

　　写作指导：这篇作文结合了提示性作文和应用文的写作要求。首先，我们要读懂英语提示的内容，也就是那封咨询信的内容。其次，我们要知道书信的写作方法。针对本道题，还要注意，这封信是以旅行社工作人员的身份来写的。最后，还要注意咨询信后的要求-从下列所给的地方中选择一个或两个符合Li Ming要求的地方，向他提出建议及字数限制。

　　下面，我们来看看范文是怎么写的。

　　One Possible version:

　　Dear Li Ming,

　　I'm Gina. It's my pleasure to give you some suggestions for your vacation spots. According to your letter, I think either Sydney or Hawaii is the best choice because they are both warm and interesting. There are some inexpensive hotels, which are clean and comfortable in both places. What's more, you can enjoy sunshine, walk on the beach and swim every day.

　　Besides, there are many good museums in Sydney. （It's also a wonderful place for shopping. ）And if you go to Hawaii, you could have a visit to Pearl Harbor, which is quite educational and historical. （And you can also enjoy exotic dances. ）

　　That's just my idea. I hope it would give you some help.

　　Yours,

　　Gina

　　对于，提示作文的写法大家都会了吗？不管什么作文的写作，都要要求我们对英语的词汇、短语以及常用的表达方法有一定的积累。所以，在学习写作的同时，不要放松对以上几个方面的复习。

　　英语写作是中考中检测学生语言应用能力的最重要部分。

　　提高中考写作水平，需要有效的训练。正确无误的造句能力和各种文体的写作技巧，两者缺一不可。

　　正确无误的造句能力

　　这得从初中一开始就抓起，首先可以从替换单词、扩词造句训练，做到有效积累，扩大视野，灵活运用。

　　如：如何修饰一个最简单、最常用的"说"？我们就可以写出许多：say some thing gladly（merrily excitedly sadly kindly worriedly loudly sweetl ytimidly bravely confidently）

　　还可说say some thing in a friendly way.替换了一个副词，生动地表达了说话时的不同心情。

　　扩词有：play football--play foot ball in the play ground--play football in the play ground with my friends--play football in the play ground with my friends after school.对其中的动词我们还可替换成playgames，play the piano…等，后面的状语都可以有相应的更换。

　　又如：a friend--my friend--my close friend--my close friend named Mary.以此类推，我们可以模仿着进行扩句训练。The students love life.--The studentsof Class One love enjoyable school life verymuch.为了避免句型的重复，我们还可以转换不同的句型，来表达同一内容。如：The dictionary is so big that it doesn't fit in tomy pocket.--The dic ti on ary is too big to fit into my pocket.--The dictionary is not small enough to fit into my pocket.

　　这样训练写句的方法，可以帮助学生克服心里先想好中文，然后逐字翻译的不良习惯，从而造的句子符合英语表达的习惯。

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